sambyrne
From unknown
24 September 2008 - 10:44am
Hi my name is Sam.
This is a song i wrote last week after the revelation that the grace of God really does set us free.
I know the recording and singing and playing quality isnt great but any comments are welcome.
I am doing my last ever worship set at my church on Sunday before i go to uni and really hope to bring the song then as a prayer asking God to set me on the right path as i embark on my new journey.
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gavinball
From Fishponds Baptist Church, Bristol, UK
24 September 2008 - 11:49am
hi sam,
nice song, any chance of posting the lyrics as it helps in making comments.
God bless,
gav.
Lord, please place my feet
and light up my path
that I, may walk in your ways each day
For I, once was
captive to my fears
but now, your grace has set me free
Your grace has set me free
Your grace has set me free
Your grace has set me free
You are all that I need
You, restore my soul
the joy, of my salvation
forever your grace has set me free
You’re all I need...
I, will fall at your feet....
You are all that I need...
I really liked the song! It is simple, comfortable and to the point.
To me the lyric could use some re-working. The phrase, “You are all I need” is wonderful but really is used a lot. The chorus could be developed to be even stronger. The phrase “your grace has set me free” is nice; I bet the idea of freedom in Gods grace could be super inspiring with just a few changesl. Maybe there is another way to put it. Or, instead of repeating the line perhaps there are other things that could be said in the chorus?
I think the first verse/3 lines don’t tie into the theme of the song as well as the other verses/lines; maybe there’s a better way to phrase those ones. Lastly, in the chorus I think you’re squeezing “and” just before “you” and it sounds like an-choo, small thing and super easy to fix.
Keep it up, good stuff!
hi sam,
nice song, v simple and heartfelt. some nice chord changes and a key change in it i think?
im not sure having the long hold on the first word of the melody line in every line of the verse works tho? by the third time it starts to get a bit tiring, anyway of adding some variety by altering the melody?
the tag section seems rushed, nice thoughts but not hugely original.
keep working at it, you have loads of gifts and all the best for going off to uni.
God bless,
gav.
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