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You Are The Lord
Started by nicklawmusic on 24 August 2008 - 11:21am
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Last song for today... this one I wrote a few years ago in reflection of a vision I had of the resurrected Christ on 9th November 2003. I've always liked the imagery in Revelation and God being a God surrounded in glory and radiance, so this was an out pouring of that really... I also wanted to go for something with a groove, like 'Sweetest Thing' by U2. It didn't quite come out like that though ;o) YOU ARE THE LORD Verse 1: Verse 2: Pre - Chorus: Chorus: Verse 3: Pre - Chorus: Chorus: Bridge: Chorus:
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hi nick,
nice song this one. i like the production and the melody in the chorus is great.
for me i would encourage you to make the song more trinity focused. you mention the father in the song but it would be great to mention the spirit and son aswell. and then use that as a reason to praise him.
the melody in the verse could also be improved. it just doesnt change very much throughout the whole verse and ends up making the verse drag a bit. when you start ad libbing in later verses and going up on the melody before the chorus then it sounds a lot better.
i also think the pre chorus needs to be part of the chorus. if you didnt have the pre ch the ch wouldnt make sense as you need the holy holy bit before hand.
final challenge, its probably better to not post 3 or 4 songs at a time (unless you really struggle to get internet access) as you wont get as many comments on each one if you posted them a couple of wks apart.
God bless,
gav.
Hey Nick
Great song, I think it's really strong. for the verse melody on last word on the second lines (maybe even forth) you could go up rather than down to add a bit of interest?
blessings
Chris.