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You Are My Father
Started by karl on 27 August 2008 - 10:21pm
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During Brian Doerkson's worship at worship central in london he said about how God was there when i was born, laughing because he had another son to love and care for. Growing up without a father and as a relativly new christian it broke my heart to know that God has been there for me from the very beggining. The recording was done at my home and i played all the instruments, accept drums which i programmed. The vocals are not amazing but it's for God and he loves it when i sing to him :) It is recorded in G but after playing it in different keys Capo 3(A#) is my fave :) Lyrics: Verse1 You are the rock on which i stand, Bridge Chorus Verse 2 tag thing
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nice work any chance of seeing the lyrics?
have added the lyrics to the body of the topic for you to view
hi karl,
i love the music of this is really anthemic and powerful.
for me lyically you need to focus what you want to say more. at the moment you seems to have several different topics running through the song which ends up lacking punch in the overall message.
for example, the first verse apart from the last line of it make sense and flows, but then the idea about forgiving sin comes in and takes over for the rest of the song. yes he is our saving grace but it would be better stick to the topic you started with that God is our father and holds us and comforts us in life.
i really like the "i know you love me" bit in the chorus. i think that could be a strong hook and if you rewrote the chorus with a new title of "I know you love me" and repeated that line more you could be onto something really special.
the bit about him being holy at the end is again a completely separate topic it would work better for me if you left out that idea and focused on the God is our dad idea as its so underused in church thesedays.
this line is confusing, "When all is lost you sing to me
The voice of the risen king". it would make more sense to say "the song of the risen king?"
i also dont think the "you are" bridge bit is needed, it doesnt really add anything lyrically or musically to the song. what about if you went straight into the chorus?
great topic to write about and with some work this coudl be great.
God bless,
gav.
Hey karl! Didn't know you were on here! Really want to encourage you mate, i think you should take into account all that gav has said, very important, but i have said it before and i will say it again your guitaring is fantastic, really adds so so much to the recording which is also very well put together by the way for a home recording! Let me know when you're back from guitar college so we can jam!
Nick C
yeah just too add the riff at the start is what my youth would call "sick"!! (translation means its well good - just in case its a northern thing!!)
yeh my youth group say that aswell chris! they seem to spell it 'sic' tho,
oopps i sound so old!
Sick, bad, wicked, all the negative words seems to mean positive things nowadays! Odd stuff! Yeah its quite hillsongy i reckon, i just think its awesome! What software do you use?
Hey Chris! How you going?
Nick C
i recorded it with logic express, i only just finished off paying for my macbook.
cheers for the comments guys espiecially Gavin, really helpful stuff :)
x Kazmaria x
liking the song karl! you should finish your other one and put them up there!
Your doin a better job than me anyways- im a tad scared puttin ma songs on here and i dnt have the recordin ability that you have- so i jst av to catch michael at the rite time to record it for me!
ill c u at warehouse 2nite- after your songs are finished and polished they said theyre guna make a warehouse cd or summin - u shud put it on there!