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Started by matthewmcchlery on 27 August 2008 - 11:18am
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Hi everyone Here is new song I have recently written about the Holy Spirit. Have a listen and let me know what you think? If you like it, you can get lyrics and chord chart from my website http://www.mattmcchlery.com/songs
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sounds nice. simple yet effective.
a couple of other thoughts:
this line seems a bit forced so it rhymes with wise.
"You illuminate my eyes". im not sure what illuminate my eyes means?
the chorus is good, but im struggling with a few of the metaphors.
a wind blowing through someone seems odd, if you said blow on me
that would make more sense. also the waves of purity idea crashing into me,
seems a bit odd also.
this line also You put strength in these empty hands, might make more sense if it was you give strength to these weary hands or you put gits in these empty hands. the idea of strength being something that is put into your hands isnt as clear as it could be.
good song tho and not regularly used subject so nice work. musically it sounds good and your voice is strong.
God bless,
Gav.