Matt Cash
From Sandals Church
Okay, this is the last one I'll post for a few until I get some feed back on it, Gloria and Jesus Over Everything. This song was written for the simple purpose of enjoying the day we've been given. It sings the truth that each day belongs to God, He created it and I get to live it for His glory. Let me know what ya'll think. Thanks!
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This is a really stirring song and very passionate lyrics, I cannot think of anything that would make it any better. I just want to encourage you to do what you're doing, it's great!
Thanks for commenting on my song, there is a new version there now.
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The melody is really nice! The production really sounds finished, so I figure this is pretty much done?
I just had a few thoughts for you; all small stuff really.
On verse 1, you may want to use “..break the darkness of the night” to keep the imagery consistent. Another thought, it feels like the sentence that starts with “As creation turns…” could use a pronoun before “see the star…” to make it flow better (i.e., “they see the star…”). Or, maybe omit “As” and then leave the two sentences as separate statements?
This is all subjective, so feel free to disregard my thoughts. But to me, “This is Your day” does make sense but felt tad ambiguous. Maybe if you found a more descriptive word to replace “this” it would be more powerful? Like, umm…Today’s your day… or something like that? (that’s probably not the best suggestion, but just to help explain).
On the 2nd verse, I thought maybe “there’s no power in these things” may need to be “there’s no power in those things” to make it grammatically correct. Maybe? :)
Its obviously a good song! The melody’s super strong, a nice one. Do keep it up!
Subjective? Yes. Helpful? Yes. Whether it's this song or the next, that's is constructive insight I can take into the next song. I posted a few things that are pretty polished. The next few posts I make will be songs in progress. Thanks man.
Glad it was helpful! If you're like me, any critical dialogue is actually nice. People (bless their hearts) tend to be overly nice when hearing a song you've written. Sometimes its nice to be nit picky so you can get better.
Anyway, this is a good song regardless and I doubt anyone would even notice anything wrong with it. You've written a really strong melody line which is something I actually struggle with in my writing.
All my best, ~Marc
Reminds me of a Brenton Brown song. I hope you'll take that as the compliment it's intended to be. I've enjoyed listening to your songs. Thanks for sharing.
No problem guys. I am grateful for the compliments and suggestions.
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Sorry, here are the lyrics:
Verse 1
A D
Hear the sound of early morn’ break the silence of the night
F#m E
As creation turns its eyes to the dawn
See the star You gave mankind make its arch across the sky
Warm the hearts of humanity with Your fire
Pre-Chorus
F#m D A E
Here in this place I will make a joyful sound
While the whole universe gives way to Your renown
Chorus
A E
This is Your day
F#m D
This is Your day
A E F#m D
I rejoice, I rejoice in Your name
Verse 2
The sorrows of the dark will retreat with the new light
As my purpose finds itself complete in You
Every hope of things to come feel brand new in the sun
Depression must go, worry let go, there’s no power in these things
Bridge
F#m D A
I am living in the light of the day your have made
E
I am living for the glory of Your name
I am living in the light of the day your have made
Yeah I’m alive because
Matt Cash
Worship Leader @ Sandals Church
Riverside, CA