Chris Sayburn
From Worship Central // Leeds Adviser
Hey guys,
Thought it was time to post something and get your thoughts / ideas on again.
I think it's finished but you may think different! As always fire any thoughts / ideas over.
As you can hear, since my last song post my voice has shifted up a few octaves, with an American twang and actually sounds good!
Ok, Ok, Singing is Kayla, a worship leader at out church who is leaving us soon back to the USA (what a gift she has/is!) She helped me write the pre-chorus and helped shaped the verse melody.
p.s This song has been in 6/8 4/4 had three different chorus' and 2 different verses melodies!!
Anyway Lyrics are
THE WHOLE EARTH TREMBLES
(You are Holy)
Verse 1
The whole earth trembles before you
The heavens’ tell of Your glory
Your people bow down in wonder of You
Verse 2
Creation cries out in longing
The night sky performs for your glory
I’m humbled, wide eyed in wonder of You
Pre-chorus
For I have seen Your mighty works oh God
They are wonderful, wonderful
Chorus
I’m falling down on my knees again
I lay down everything I have
Surrendered this heart will sing of how (sing it out?)
You are Holy
You are Holy
Verse 3:
The hands that rolled out the skies
Are reaching out to hold mine
Who am I that, you would be mindful of me?
Bridge:
Holy, Holy, Holy are You God Almighty
Worthy, worthy of all praise (prob will look for something stronger / less obvious here)
Only, only You are God Almighty
Only, only You are God
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I love the melody and how all the pieces work together (melody of verses, chorus, etc.) Agree that some of the lyrics aren't super original, but sometimes they don't need to be. I think the feel of the song is really strong and could carry the lyrics. Of course, a different spin on the same idea wouldn't be a bad thing. Overall it seems pretty finished to me.
Thanks Gavina and Daniell, really helpful! ;)
If you have any ideas of tweeks do let me know
maybe something like 'you blow me away with your greatness' or something like that?
or maybe use a thesaurus for words like surrender and kneel?
almost there i think me lad.
cheers mate,
gav.
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chrissy boy!
nice to hear a new one from you mate.
i really like it, hugely accessible melody as always from you, great heart felt cry and in short really great worship song!
i think the wide eyed line could be better, plus the chorus idea of falling down on my knees surrendering all i have is fine, just not very original, i wonder if you could improve on that?
i think the bridge is fine, again not hugely original words but i think its ok as its a simple tag almost.
great singing and playing by the way mate!
cheers,
Gav.