johntwomey
From Sacred Heart, Kilburn, London
A hymn.
The lyrics are:
The Deepest Thing
The deepest thing that’s in my heart
The world in is not its author
The thing that goes all words beyond
Owes not to gold nor lover
When vanities are waved away
And frets and frolics’ dues are paid
What's left, and left eternally,
Is God, my God, and me
I, when young, made pledge to one
Hero after another
And still not done, I chased the sun
A legacy to hunt for
What mercy sweet that let me keep
Those follies I held dearly
And all the time, kept me in mind
‘Til I would ready be
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hi there,
interesting song here, thanks for sharing.
i dont think its really a congregational song but could work as a solo piece.
do you write other songs? i like it.
God bless,
gav.
This is quirky and unusual. The country style is not common in UK worship. Are you intending it for congregational singing - there are some awkward intervals arising from the unusual harmonic sequence? I like the sentiment of the lyrics, and there are some arrensting lyrics, but I think that you need to refine them as they are rather Yodaish at the moment. I would prefer 'The thing that goes beyond all words is neither gold nor lover' for instance. I think you should try to keep the lyrics closer to plain speech.
Thanks Ian
I wasn't thinking of it being used for congregational singing. I just wrote it to write it, as it were. It's a bit fiddly with some funny chords and harmonies but that's how it turned out. As the blind man at the Pool of Siloam might have put it, all I know is that it's done!
John
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Hello John,
This is quirky and unusual - do you intend it for congregational use? The country music feel is rare in the UK and some of the intervals are quite awkward to sing. I like the sentiments of the lyrics but I do think you need to refine them as they have a Yodaesque quality at several points. Would it not be better to say 'The thing that goes beyond all words is neither gold nor lover'? I think it's better to aim for clarity and normal speech patterns.
God bless,
Ian
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