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Spirit inviting song....

Started by si_jenns on 20 August 2008 - 9:22pm

20 August 2008 - 9:22pm

I wrote this song when i realised that there was a need for another spirit inviting song and just a song with some room to let the spirit move....we kind of used 'there must be more than this' an awful lot and it was at risk of being killed, so I have tried writing this with also a trinitarian slight (I took on the challenge of writing a song about more than just one part of the trinity!)...It's taken about 8 months to get to the state its at currently, any ideas would be greatfully appreciated-I feel like it may be nearly finished but who knows?
Please excuse the bad one track recording!

Capo 3

Gsus G Gsus G Em D
Father, would you rest on this place in your mercy
Gsus G Gsus G Em D
Stir up, a song in my heart just for you lord
Gsus G Gsus G Em D
My soul yearns, for the touch of your spirit to fill me
Gsus G Gsus G Em D
Your breath Lord, brings joy to my heart and sustains me

Pre-chorus
C D Em
Pour out your spirit on this thirsty heart
C D
Restore my soul

Chorus:
G
Breathe on me O breathe of God
Em
Come breathe on me, fill me again
C D
Come spirit you’re all I need
Em D
Fill me again

Verse 2:

Jesus, would you draw me close to the father
Transform me in ever-increasing glory

Bridge
It's for your glory Lord
It's for your glory Lord
Your Glory Lord

AttachmentFile Size
troubles come 3
4.34 MB
21 August 2008 - 8:53am

hi there nice song so far, thanks for sharing.

i cant hear really hear the vocals on the recording unfortunately so it makes it hard to comment on.

the lyrics are good. maybe a few tweaks here and there would compelte it.

this line seems a little out of place, 'Stir up, a song in my heart just for you lord'. its a nice thought im just not sure it fits with the theme of the song. maybe if you tweaked it and said stir up a love in my heart that might be better? although i would leave out the love for our neighbour bit of scripture so maybe not?!!

v2 seems a lot shorter than v1 any reason for that?

the bridge seems a bit rushed lyrically. any way of saying something slightly less repetitive there?

God bless,
gav.
26 August 2008 - 12:21pm

Hi,

Thanks so much for your reply. I'll have a play with the 'stir up a song in my heart just for you' line.

I played this on the worship central retreat and the general consensus from all is that v2 should be shorter as v1 is quite long.

I totally understand what you mean about the bridge, I'm rather unsure what to say there though, does anyone have any ideas?

Thanks

Si

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28 August 2008 - 4:52pm

Don't get discouraged though! Repetitive bridges do work :P Have you heard Healer by Hillsong (I guess you have by now as it has seemed to circulate very quickly), the bridge is:

nothing is impossible for You,
nothing is impossible,
nothing is impossible for You,
You hold my world in Your hands.

Likewise, Consuming Fire:

Stir it up in our hearts Lord,
Stir it up in our hearts Lord,
Stir it up in our hearts a passion for Your name.

Similarly The Highest and the Greatest:

And we're lifting You high, higher and higher,
Lifting You high, higher and higher,
Lifting You high, higher and higher Lord

etc

Sometimes it's good just to meditate on a phrase for the bridge so Si don't get discouraged :P

Just a thought,
take it or leave it :P
Ant :D
24 September 2008 - 12:47am

Hi there

I really like your song. I think the pre-chorus is really good in how it builds up musically, as well as the lyrics which I feel is very powerful.

I was wondering re the lyric: "My soul yearns for the touch of the Spirit to fill me" I know what you are trying to say, but wasn't sure how to interpret the "touch of the Spirit" in this sense. I was wondering if something like: "My soul yearns for your Spirit to come and fill me" may work better.

Just a suggestion, but I really like the song, well done!

C