Josh Baines
From Frinton Free Church
11 April 2009 - 6:01pm
Hey guys, here is a song that i wrote about a year ago. Our church did a live recording in December 08 and this the result. There are a few timing issues because we didn't play to a click track (lesson learned). It would be great to get some feedback. So here you go:
Verse:
You reached down from the heavens
and revealed Your matchless worth
Jesus of Nazareth
Creator of the heavens and earth
Chorus:
You are the sinners saviour
Lord of all
Strength for the weary
you are the sinners saviour
Majesty
My king now forever
Verse:
You sent Your Son
and a sacrifice was made
Jesus of Nazareth
He died for all our sin and shame
Bridge:
Just how could You love me
just how could You save
thank You that You love me
yesterday today the same
Thanks
Josh
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jonathan.ray
From Church of the Apostles
11 April 2009 - 9:28pm
Hey Josh! Great song! Really love the melody, especially the first line of the Chorus! Great job, God has definitely given you a gift. Here are my only two critiques:
#1 I think you really vamp the chorus melody with the first line but take it down with the second line. It doesnt sound bad at all, I just think that the melody could keep the same power as the first line. That would make for a melodically anthem-ish chorus all throughout. This is strictly my opinion my friend :)
#2 could you explain the "just how could you save" line in the bridge. Are you implying "just how could you save me"?
Great song! I'd love it if you could have a listen and critique my two songs iv'e posted too! They are "rescuing love" and "no one".
P.S. Great job with doing this without a click. Not bad at all.
Peace,
Jonathan
Thanks mate that is really helpful. Yes the line is meant to mean just how could you save me. i will definatly check out your songs.
Thank you,
Josh
Hey Josh
I love the song so much! The chorus is amazing! and the musicianship and the melodies through out all the song is amazing! Really an amazing piece!
If i was to be challenging and this could be seen as a bit petty but i thought i might be quite good to have the "he died for all our sin and shame" in the first verse... so the idea of a sinless savious is made clear from the outset! So maybe have the verses switched around....
But its only a really small thing and a personal opinion! but let it take nothing away from your song its brilliant and inspired me to step back and praise god! which is pretty god seeing as its 11 minutes past midnight on easter sunday!!
big blesings
Thanks David thats not a bad idea i will have a look and maybe re-jigging the verses.
Thanks
Josh
Thanks David thats not a bad idea i will have a look and maybe re-jigging the verses.
Thanks
Josh
hi josh
great song and top recording.
the only thing that confuses me is how you change between singing to 'you' and about 'Jesus'.
that mneans that the song is directed to the father which makes perfect sense until you get to the chorus. then you say 'you are the sinners saviour'. are you directing this at the father or Jesus?
of course the father and the son are one, but the father sent the son to be our saviour (through the spirits power) so im a bit confused thats all! any thoughts?
you could get around this by changing the chorus to something like:
"you sent the sinners saviour,
to die for us,
and give strength to the weary
you sent the sinners saviour
the only Christ
who reigns now forever'
God bless
gav.
Josh,
I really like this. The chorus melody is great, but like Jonathan said there might be something in playing about with the second line.
My only suggestion would be that "You are the sinners saviour" is an abstract term that doesn't necessarily have a direct personal connection. How about the second time in the chorus having "You are this sinner's saviour" ? Would make it much more personal, and covers the truths that Jesus died for everyone, and me as an individual.
Thanks guys, it's great having a new look on the song, looking at it in more depth than just the face value of it. i will definatly have a play around with it and like Paul and Jonathan said make the chorus more peronal. Thanks guys for your input you are all LEGends!!!
Josh
Just a quick thought: "You reached down from the heavens" kinda makes it feel like God only partially came to earth, or that it was at arms length somehow. I know that's not what you mean, but is there a way of wording it to explicitly state that Jesus FULLY came as a man? Perhaps "You came down from the heavens" would be better?
Matt
Yea like you said it was just metaphorical of God coming down to earth, but i underdtand what you are saying.
Josh
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