Hey Pete! Looks pretty good! It's a nice set of lyrics. I could not give it a listen unfortunately, said “File not found”? Just one thought, maybe I’m just slow or grammatically challenged, but “Alive now again” is throwing me. The use of the word now right next to again just seems an awkward way to put things... again, I'm not sure I'd say it needs to be changed just yet. Worth a thought I guess. While I’m pretending to be the grammar police ;) is not men the plural of man? Like, shouldn’t it be “what are men that you think of them?” Oye, my head hurts! I’m not the best source for grammatical corrections; need Gav to check in on this one! Good Stuff! Keep it up!

Hi Pete, I really like the feel to this song and enjoyed listening to it. From a lyrical perspective I would encourage you try to stay on one theme within the song. Someone once said to me that a worship song should be able to be summarised in one sentence, which is something that I try to do... The verse and the chorus are firmly rooted in Psalm 8 which is great, but then the part about Jesus seems to veer off on a tangent which doesn't seem to quite tie in thematically with the rest of the song. On another, slightly nit-picky, point, the song starts with "When I look to the skies [and see all the wonderful things you've made/done]" but doesn't quite complete the sentence, if that makes sense? i.e. When I see X I do/say/find, etc... This could be fixed by finding a way of putting an I in after the first line, so it would be: When I look to the skies I see the work of your hands The moon and the stars set in place. This would allow for the second half of the verse and wouldn't feel like an incomplete sentence! I love the guitaring and think this song has enormous potential with just a little honing! Keep it up and sorry for the long post and the grammatical nitpicking! Alex

I agree with what Alex is saying- it is rooted in Psalm 8 and then goes into the "Jesus the saviour" bit, which is scripturally correct, but it didn't fit with the rest of the song. I found that section a bit repetitive and it doesn't fit lyrically with the rest of the song, which I personally think is lyrically strong.

Hi guys, I think you're probably right about the second verse not being quite on the same theme, I guess I was trying to fit too much in one song! I'll see if I can write a second verse more in keeping with the first... As for the man/men question, its man as in mankind (plural) rather than one bloke. Make sense? thanks for the help, anymore thoughts then keep them coming! Dan