paulrobertson
From St Silas, Glasgow
2 September 2008 - 9:45pm
Taken from Psalm 24 and intended as a call to worship-type song. Feedback on any of it welcome.
Open up these heavenly gates
Let the King of Glory enter in.
Open up these heavenly gates
Let the King of Glory enter in.
Who is this King of Glory?
Who is this King of Glory?
Who is this King of Glory?
Who is this King of Glory?
He’s our Lord, mighty in battle.
He’s our Lord, powerful to save.
He’s our Lord, gracious to heal us.
He’s our Lord, welcome Him in.
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Neil
From Cove, Aberdeen
2 September 2008 - 10:20pm
Hi Paul,
This is taken nicely from Psalm 24.
Things that might be worth having a look at are the "enter in" bits, I dont think you gain anything from the long pauses.
Also there seems to be a big jump in tempo and melody into "Who is the King of Glory"
I'm no expert, and I dont really feel qualified to comment too much on other folks songs, so please take or leave the comments, but with these lyrics you have a good framework for building on.
God Bless
Neil
It would be interesting to find out where you are with this one as it is.
Starting off? Been at it a while? Already using it?
Blessings
Neil
hey i love this song, but musically i don't think it really fits going from the first bit 'Open up these heavenly gates' to the second bit Who is this King of Glory?. maybe you could play around with how to make the transition better?
And i think you should go back to the first bit at the end :D
Cheers
Iain
hi paul,
nice work with this so far.
i love the feel of it, it could work really well with a full band.
i agree with neil about the big pause, if you took it out it would make the line flow better.
i dont have a problem with the transition from open up to who is this king of glory bit although the who is this king of glory bit is far too repetitive for me. i would either change the melody more or put some more lyrics in that section, or both.
i really like your 'sound' tho, its very natural and i love hearing your accent coming through.
God bless,
gav.
Thanks all for your comments.
Neil, this is version 1.1 and I put it together in the last week, so plenty scope to try out different versions. I'll have a go at removing the pause in the first section.
Iain, the aim was that it might work as a circular song - but I only recorded one run through. I'll record a couple of run throughs for version 2. :o)
Gav, I have an accent? ;o) I would agree that the "who is this King of Glory" is currently too samey. I think lyrically I'll try something different. I like the idea of the simple melody lines repeating and then layer something over the second two lines (which would clearly work better with a band!)
Paul
Just a quick comment, I absolutely love the guitar in this, the rhythm is fantastic- would get me to enter in!
Thanks for posting!
BexParr
Hi Paul
If this is 1.1 I am looking forward to 2.2 and 3.3!!!
I agree with the guys it would be great to work on the musical transistion from verse to chorus and make it flow more.
I like the 'Who is this King of glory?' but maybe it would be more interesting if added more of God's attributes lyrical and alternated the syllables, if that makes sense?
e.g.
Who is this King of Glory? 2
Who is this King of grace? 1
Who is this King of Mercy? 2
Who is this King of love? 1
Just a thought mate.
God bless
mark
i really like marks idea for the who is this king bit.
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