Hamish Blackie
From Church of the Good Shepherd (Massey, Auckland, NZ)
hi i'm new at this (songwriting) and would like some feedback please
please forgive the bad recording
it was the first time preformed and was evolving even as we were preforming it
cheers
hamish
ps. having a bit of trouble the (chord) formating
Get to know me
Verse 1
C
get to know me
Am
get to know me
F C
were the words you said to me
C
get to know me
A
get to know me
F C
you spoke deep in side of me
Chorus
F
get to know me
C
get to know me
D G
like Samuel woken from his sleep
F
get to know me
C
get to know me
G C
your servant listens, please Lord speak
Verse 2
C
get to know me
Am
get to know me
F C
the Lord is speaking to his sheep
C
get to know me
Am
get to know me
F C
we will listen we’ll hear You speak
Bridge
Am
fore you knew me before the start of time
E
every chapter every line
F
was written well before my time
C G
in blood that set me free
C
get to know me
Am
get to know me
F C
all you ask of me is
C
get to know me
Am
get to know me
C
get to know me
Am
get to know me
F
get to know me
C
get to know me
C
speaking through the ages
Am
speaking through the ages
F
speaking through the ages
C
get to know me
copyright hamish blackie 14/06/2010 3:45pm
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Hi Hamish
im not sure about the (get to know me) lines. the verses are really good. im not sure about the (speaking through the ages) lines.
your song needs some more structured verses, chorus and bridge to make it less repetative. i really like the rest of the words.
im not sure about the (in blood that set me free) it dosent really make sence with the rest of the song.
how about
the words that you said to me
you spoke deep in side of me
like Samuel woken from his sleep
i will listen, please Lord speak
the Lord is speaking words to me
i will listen i hear You speak
you knew me before the start of time
every chapter every line
it was written well before my time
before i was alive
some of the lines are (i) and the other lines are (we), this looks more like a personal song.
what do you want to do with this song? it needs to have more meaty verses chorus and bridge, to make it more concregational.
i think you should stick to (i) being you, rather than (we) being others. this song has a lot of potential keep on working on it.