IAIN
From St Alfreds Anglican Church
8 October 2008 - 9:17am
hey guys, posted this one a while back.
Now I have it a bit better completed. I just got my recording stuff set up and am still figuring it out. It isnt a very great recording but you will get enoiugh of an idea.
Here is the song
God You are my God
Earnestly I seek You
In the darkest place
Your light will shine though
I have seen You
And beheld You majesty
I lift my hands
As I glorify your name
Living Water Breath of life
You alone can satisfy
Praise the one who gave his life
Jesus Christ my one desire
Your love is greater
So my lips will sing
Of my great sustainer
Jesus Christ
One thing I am thinking of changing the last 2 lines in vs 1 to:
My body longs for you
My soul is thirsty
It fits more with the psalm but itis harder to sing.
I would realy love feedback on this one as ive been working on it for nearly a year and feel i am finaly getting close to it being somewere like finished.
God bless
Iain
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Marc Proctor
From New Hope Church
8 October 2008 - 9:19pm
Ian, I like the song. I think I'd prefer the lines you are considering because they seem to lead into the chorus quite nicely. I’d agree that they seem to roll of the tongue a bit difficultly though. It seems that the toughest words are longs, body, and the –ty of thirsty. I think “heart” may be an easy juxtaposition with “body”. I say that because contemporary language seems to define the heart as your inner being. If you’d agree, that seems to be a bit more accurate anyhow. Perhaps “My heart aches (for you) and my soul thirsts (for you)” might flow a bit better? I’m not at a spot where I can play my guitar and what not to try it personally…
Its always hard when you’re trying to get content out of short lines like this. But, I think I was able to easily follow where you were going. I didn’t think any of the lines lead away from the concept of the song. The chorus is really strong. That lifts the song quite a bit. I think it may be worthwile to consider this change, it is: “Of my great sustainer Jesus Christ” Maybe it could be: “Of Jesus Christ my (the) great sustainer”
Well done sir, talented stuff. Have you tried leading with it? How’d it go?
hi there,
nice song, i like the feel of it and it could work well with a band.
i dont think repeating the God you are my god verse really adds anything, it just seems to make the song drag slightly.
living water is a good title and quite original, might be worth using the lyrics to say something more about what the bible says about God satifsying us, ie like john 4 the women at the well idea.
also this line is a bit confusing, 'your love is greater', it begs the questions, greater than what?
God bless,
ga..
Thanks for the comments guys, has got me thinking!
Marc: No i havnt lead it. I dont lead very often (maybe once a term or so) and the church I go to isnt huge on singing songs that people in the congregation have written. Mainly because I dont think anyone really write songs to be used in corporate worship. But our senior minister did say about a month ago in a sermon how he thought it would be great if we did sing some songs written by people in the church for the obvious reasons. So I might try it sometime next year when I am leading on a more regular basis.
I will have a play around with your lyric suggestions, I have been really stuck on those last 2 lines in vs 1 so thanks for your ideas, they are greatly apreciated!
Gav: I agree with you with repeating vs 1. It does make it drag. The Your love is greater line i took from vs 3 of psalm 63 "Because your love is better than life, my lips will glorify you. " I understand what you mean though. Any ideas of an ulternat lyric?
I did originally look at john 4 when i was writing this but I wanted it to be more focused directly on psalm 63. Was there anything in articular that you thought I should include?
Cheers guys
Iain
something like your love is awesome might work? or your love is perfect maybe?
Hi Iain,
This is really sounding good.
My own comment would be (other than some of those above) Try nailing the last line in the chorus, it sort of dwindles out instead of hitting you.
Jesus Christ my one desire! exclaim it! This may or may not be good imagary, but imagine Darlene Zschech singing this line at the end of a chorus
If you drop me a note of the chorus chords, I can record what I mean. Its difficult to put in words.
God Bless
Neil
ok kool that would be great neil!
These are the chords to the song. Its capo 4 on the recording.
G
God You are my God
C
Earnestly I seek You
G
In the darkest place
D...............C
Your light will shine though
.........Em...D...C
I have seen You
.....G.............D.....C
And beheld Your majesty
..Em.....D...C
I lift my hands
.....G...D........C....D
As I glorify your name
Em....G.......C
Living Water Breath of life
Em..G..........D
You alone can satisfy
Em.........G.........C
Praise the one who gave his life
Em....G..........D....G
Jesus Christ my one desire
Your love is greater
So my lips will sing
Of my great sustainer
Jesus Christ
Thanks heaps!
iain
Hi Iain,
These are links to recordings of your chorus that I tried.
(one on capo 4 - B, the other on capo 3 - Bb)
http://www.mediafire.com/?gzaty2ntmgr (B)
http://www.mediafire.com/?ymwjl2tdzb4 (Bb)
I have to say I struggled a bit in B, and found it easier in Bb.
To do what I was trying to do, I had to change the last chorus line to
Em__G_______C_______
Jesus Christ my one desire
The recordings will hopefully let you hear how I hear the last chorus line.
Blessings
Neil
Hi Iain,
Something esle to consider.
Living water, breath of life.
You alone can satisfy
John 6:35
Then Jesus declared, "I am the bread of life. He who comes to me will never go hungry, and he who believes in me will never be thirsty.
Living water, bread of life.
You alone can satisfy.
It has a bit more meat to it, makes more sense and ties the lines together.
Blessings
Neil
Thanks for all your input Neil!!!
I find it relay encouraging that you have not just listened to the song, though this is alright and commented that but you have thought about it. Thankyou!
I am in the middle of preparing for church tonight but I like your ideas. The bread of life thing was something that I did think about and kind of forgot about it, but now you have brought my mind back to it.
I will play through your ideas for the chorus later on and comment back about them, but i really like your ideas!
God bless,
Iain
Can you translate this into English please???
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