In this months episode we have great new song and interview from Soul Survivor's Beth Croft. Also Tim and Ben have a 'perfect pitch' show down!
22 May 2009 - 5:56pm
Well I finally plucked up the courage to post something I've been working on. Any C & C would be very much appreciated. I think the lyrics in the chorus can flow better but I'll see what you guys think.
Also the vocal is reasonably rough, recording yourself singing is such a pain!
There is power in the name of Jesus
Power in his glorious name
Death is beaten in the name of Jesus
Lift up his name, We lift up his name
There is freedom in the name of Jesus
Freedom in his glorious name
We are rescued in the name of Jesus
Lift up his name, We lift up his name
At His name we will bow
And confess he is Lord
At His name lay our crowns
And fall down at the feet of Jesus
Fall down at the feet of Jesus
For there's no sweeter name
Throughout all of the earth
Than of our God who saves
Oh there's no higher name than Jesus
There's no higher name than Jesus
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22 May 2009 - 6:29pm
Hey Rob, I think this song has a lot of potential. The verses are really emotive and build well in regards to the verse melody and the chords beneath it. The lyrical theme is strong and focused.
I think the Chorus does need to flow a little better and have more of a hook. This can be achieved through having a shorter chorus, maybe half the length? therefore making it more memorable. The production has a lot of potential too. Everything has been recorded well. The guitars are really clear and rounded. You have a good voice too.
Good work. Look forward to hearing more of your Worship songs!
Jonny
Hey Rob
just quick 2 things
Wasnt sure about the guitar in the background, for me it was a little distracting to the other instruments which werewell crafted.
And the line Lift up his name, We lift up his name felt a little odd as the melody felt like it didnt do the words justice. but it sounded great when you gave the words some welly later on in the song.
Pete
Thank you both for your kind words.
@Peter - Which guitar parts specifically did you have in mind? There's up to four going at once at some point!
I agree about the chorus needing to be catchier, however as it currently is it feels structurally wrong to half it's length. But I have some ideas which may or may not fix that so I'll get back to you!
I really love this man! Great job. It's very honest and true. I like the challenge of the line, "Lift up his name, We lift up his name" and the line "Fall down at the feet of Jesus" reminds me of the women who anoints Jesus feet in extravagant worship. Good job. I know you probably want criticism, but i think this is a well written song that shouldn't be over thought or over written. It's finished my friend. Maybe play around with the bridge a bit more? Just a thought, but lyrically the song and melody feel done. P.S. there is a lack of long choruses out there and i like this one you have. it feels like a hymn. Peace my friend and I'd love to hear some of your thoughts on my band's songs. I lead our band and do the songwriting, singing, and rhythm work. (virb.com/waketoday)
Grace & Peace,
jonathan ray
virb.com/waketoday
I love it.... i think its brialliant.
I felt moved to worship.. what more do you u want from a worship song?
plus its all about jesus
amazing
Hey Robert - sorry taken a while to get back to your question. The guitar that comes in with the second verse and continues, for me it is a little to harsh and takes up alot of space with the way the rhythm is. But waht do I know! lol
Pete
Hi Robert.
Just reading it first, I confess to wondering about its some of its structure initially. BUT then I listened to it. GREAT SONG mate. Well done! Want to use it at Ps and Gs! :-)
One or two thoughts to chuck out there should you feel inclined to read on. The line "Lift up his name, We lift up his name" jars slightly for me - the first half implies the second person ie YOU, and the second half is in the first person WE. So I don't quite know to whom I am singing and my head is playing tricks with me! Interestingly in the tag towards the end you shove in the WE in front of both halves so maybe that's more what you're inclined towards. BUT you could also possibly change it to "Lift up his name, won't you lift up his name" or the like if you prefer that slant?
Secondly in the chorus; "At His name lay our crowns And fall down at the feet of Jesus". I wonder if the "lay our crowns" would benefit from being "lay (...) down". Lay on its own sounds a bit chopped. How about "At His name lay our crowns down and fall at the feet of Jesus"? This would also make the repeat of the line a bit fresher with "fall down"?
Lastly, (phew, he says!) and musically I'd love the melody to bounce up for one note then back down again at the ends of the following lines, on the Je- of Jesus, rather than staying:
"And fall down at the feet of Jesus"
"Oh there's no higher name than Jesus"
Other than that I've not much to say! ;-)
Fabulous. Thank you for "plucking up the courage"!
Glory be....!
Mart
Robert this song is simply astounding!
Could you post the chords?
And don't worry about your vocals. They sound amazing.
Alex
Rocked by the Rock
It's just powerful! I am moved. Keep pouring out more and more like this.
Shalom
Tali
you have a great voice man , decent song
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