Hey Paul!

Trying to be more vulnerable/honest in my lyrics. I worry it gets outside of "musical-congregational-worship" but I feel people would respond to it; So I'm practicing... :)

Thanks for the thoughts! Most helpful. I agree, some development is warrented. I've been tossing around an idea for a "response" of sorts to follow, something to the regard of what you mentioned, it would build off of the end of the song and be the high point. Maybe a repeat of the first two lines isn't necessary in the intro; it is kind of bland at the moment.

I see what you mean with the imagery. It is kind of a jump to go from the heart/soul bit to an image of one’s face. In my mind I saw it as a transition from the inner-soul to the physical, sort of like you feel sad so you cry… but I agree that the transition could be made stronger. Or maybe I’ll scrap the line “roll off of my face” for something better.

Thanks again! Super helpful as always.

Hey Gav!

I hear ya. I'm trying to find a balance between personal/conversational language and congregational language. I don't think I hit it with this song, but gotta start somewhere!

I hear what your saying about developing the song to acknowledge Jesus is there with us. I also have been wrestling with that in my songwriting. I've come to the conclusion (for now...) that, in some ways, asking question of God does bring Him into our lives, or acknowledges Him. (I'd assume the attitude behind the question isn't destructive) I think I kind of want to get away from feeling I need to always put the disclaimer on my songs, you know something that balances my human situation with God's sovereignty; especially when my human situation has focused itself on God. Know what I mean? I'm still working through these ideas, and maybe that thought isn't right, I'm totally open to being wrong here. But that is what I've been thinking lately...