Hi Rob Noticed no-one has commented on this yet - no idea why, except that this forum is going completely mad with the podcast thing. You've got lots of interesting ideas going on in this song - and it has a nice gentle feel. I think you probably need to do a bit of refining, now, to take the ideas that you feel work best in the song and focus on them. For me, the strongest section is the middle one, the "In your presence" bit - at least, it would be easiest to sing along to. The tune in the first part is a little too unpredictable, and I can imagine a congregation taking a while to pick it up while they search for the right notes. I'd try to get to the last section a bit faster too - for me it's too long a break. The phrase "I will delight myself in you" is odd - I think it is the word "myself". What you want to say is "I will delight in you", the myself sounds a bit too "me focussed". "Let your presence fall" is a bit of a strange picture. Can presence fall? Perhaps you could say something else there. "Sent your daylight, took my night time" feels a bit clumsy, because of the missing "you" in each phrase. You could change it to "Send your daylight, take my night time". Hope that's helpful.