alexboxall
From New Community, Southampton
I posted the original version of this song here:
http://www.worshipcentral.org/forum/topic/i-know-you-love-me-third-attempt
However, as a result of the comments on that thread, along with some other advice, I've re-recorded a fuller demo for people to hear.
Comments are still welcome!
Lyrics are:
You're here throughout the silence
When I don't hear you speak
You're near despite the distance
I may feel You are from me
You hold me when I'm broken
You're here to make me whole
I'll find You in the longing
In the sighing of my soul
But I don't have to hear You whisper
I don't have to hear You speak
To (I) know You love me
Love me so
For why else would You open Your arms and die for me on that cross?
What other reason could You have to pay that great cost?
All comments welcome!
Thanks,
Alex
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alexboxall
From New Community, Southampton
I like it!
I like how the bridge is a nice response to the chorus.
The only thing I noticed, (small, but just in lieu of wanting to be helpful) was there is a conceptual transition in the verse; where you go from contrasting words (silence-speak/distance-nearness) to exploring God’s interaction with us. I do think the two are related, but I was wondering if you separated the two (via V1 and V2 or something like that) if it would be more focused and conceptually strong. That was my only thought.
Really nothing big, just rambling about stuff for you to consider. I do think it’s a really nice song you put together here! Really like it!
Keep it up!
Great song, mate. Nice and simple, honest, easy to pick up, and a good register for anyone to sing.
Hi Alex, really nice song. Again like Marc just giving you ideas, think you have a strong melody and good simple chords structure. One thing I expecting (not sure why) was to go back to the "I don't have to hear you wisher" after the bridge. For me that is the pivotal part of the song that you don't need to hear God to know he is there - its a faith thing. I love that idea in worship - not needing to see God to believe in him.
More than that you could take it up another level after the bridge and go bigger. Sure you've probably already thought about these things.
Thanks for sharing this song - really like it!
Thanks guys. Your comments are much appreciated! I think that in a live setting I would probably go back to the pre-chorus at the end. An excellent suggestion!
Thanks again,
Alex
oops, double post!
Great job, thats a very good strong song. In the chorus have you thought about going to the minor after the 'so' and then to chord 4? Might help that bit flow a bit better.
Also I agree the bridge thematically flows well from the chorus, but is there a way to say the bridge in a different way, I'm just thinking that the rhyme 'cross' 'cost' can be a bit overused and it would be great to get those two lines stronger as it's a cracking song apart from that.
Thanks Robert. I will be trying the minor chord thing and will let you know how it turns out!
Alex
Thanks Robert. I will be trying the minor chord thing and will let you know how it turns out!
Alex
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