Hi Ian, Thanks for sharing your song words. It sounds very much like a modern hymn (in a Stuart Townend sort of style) - I think sometimes hymns work quite well with an added chorus or coda (eg Amazing Grace by Chris Tomlin and Tim Hughes' version of When I Survey). It would be interesting to hear the melody becuase there are quite a lot of words in the verses, but I like the theme and use of words.

Hi Ian, Nice Christmas song. It's very different from most of the other stuff on here but that's not a bad thing at all and it works well as a nativity song. I'm really liking the little riff in the beginning - for me it's got a bit of an Eastern feel (I think you're using 4th here which sound really nice). I'd be tempted to pick up on that theme and maybe embellish on the "Easternness" of it. Guess for me it creates an image of the Kings coming to see the Christ child. Almost like their "theme music" if this were in the context of a movie or musical. Other thought was to lose the bar between the 2nd and 3rd line of each verse (ie: All around are the angels whose voices fill the skies.
 Let us bring to that infant the tokens of our love.
) I think it might flow better - for me, at the moment it loses some momentum. Really like the lyric of the whole song and especially the 3rd verse. You've got the gospel message in there very succinctly - well done mate! Good example of a few words saying a lot. Really nice stuff - have you considered writing a 4 part vocal harmony for this (or at least the chorus)? I think some classical harmony applied to this (rather than just stacking 3rds and 4ths) might work a treat here - not that I'm opposed to stacking - stacking is GREAT but for this style of music I think some well constructed well spaced harmony could really work. Any chance of posting the chords for us (I know it doesn't all align but we'd get the general gist.) Good one Ian - and well done for posting on everyone else's songs too mate. I see you've been quite busy. Blessings Wayne

Alright Ian,

3 things:

1. This has a lovely settled quality to it that resonates just so with the image of a baby resting. I am not surprised that you had people interested in it.

2. It reminds me very much of Michael Joncas, the admirable American writer and performer. He did "On Eagle's Wings" and many more.

3. I think the harmony adds "mo" (momentum) at the end. I suspect that my music background is very different to your own, pop being more my thing. That being the case, I am probably not qualified to make suggestions but would you think of adding more harmonic voices at the end? A Beatlesque 3 would be agreeable.

God bless.

John Twomey

Hey mate - the additional harmony is really lovely and again very "Chrismassy" (I know it's a crude and totally non-scriptural term but I'm sure you know what I mean). How's it going with this song? Did you guys do it at Christmas time? Nice one again mate.

Wayne

Ah mate - that is awesome. Nice one