Josh Gauton
From St Thomas Crookes Sheffield
30 September 2008 - 11:20am
Hey everyone, I was wondering if I could get feedback on this song I wrote recently. I was fortunate enough to be able to travel a fair bit this summer, and saw some great works of God, so felt it appropriate to write a song based on the wonders of God and his creation.
Here are the lyrics:
You have set your glory above the heavens
Creative hands commanded earth and sea
Your awesomeness is glimpsed in all creation
But the limits of your awesomeness unknown
How majestic is your name
How majestic is your name
How majestic is your name in all the earth
Hear all creation sing glory to God
The heavens declare your wonders, O Lord
For you are mighty, everlasting and true
Father we are honoured to worship you
Father we are honoured to worship you
I see the mighty works of your fingers
The sun, the moon, the radiant stars
You raised the mountains, filled the oceans
And with a word breathed life into the world
How majestic...
Hear all creation...
There are none like you
There are none like you
There are none like you our God
Hear all creation...
Thanks in advance for any comments!
(ps if anyone can think of a better name please say, I am still unsure if this is the right title)
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gavinball
From Fishponds Baptist Church, Bristol, UK
30 September 2008 - 3:25pm
hi josh,
nice song you sing and play really well. this is a great song idea and will be superb with a few tweaks i think.
for me the im struggling with your title the same way that i did with another similar song idea on this site as all creation doesnt sing and worship God. just think about non christians. they are Gods creation too, yet dont sing praises or worship him. if you said 'hear your creation sing..' instead that would make more sense.
i would love the how majestic is your name bit to be a more powerful and anthemic.
i think the last how majestic is too rushed at the moment. the song seems to lose momentum at the end of the chorus with the instrumental section before the repeat of father we are honoured to worship you.
aside from that great potential with this song i think it will be great when finished.
God bless,
gav.
Hey gav, thanks for the feedback!
I can see what you mean about the momentum of the song at the end of the chorus. Any suggestions? Perhaps instead of playing the same chord during that period i could add another in which would have a similar feel to the off beat chord that is in the intro. Would that be sufficient do you reckon? Hopefully you can understand what i mean, i didnt word that too well!
In regards to the power and anthemic-ness of the prechorus (how majestic), when i do this song with a full band i would hope to possibly build this part into the chorus using lots of drums and a decent bass riff, whilst holding out the chords on guitars. I reckon this would elevate the prechorus sufficiently. And maybe with the rushed part perhaps making sure i sang evenly on the beat would help.
Im not sure though about the thing with 'all creation', isnt it the case that even non-christians give glory to god by the very fact that god has made them and has made them well, so although they are not directly singing they are completing the function of singing praise to god: to give him glory? I might be wrong, im just unsure. Though perhaps replacing 'hear' with 'let' would be a good way to avoid any complications?
Thanks again,
Josh
hi josh,
yeh im not totally sure either with teh all creation sing bit. i dont know that a non christian can give glory to God unless they believe in him tho? im not sure i think a theologan is needed here!
as for the end of the chorus i just think you leave too big a gap before repeating the 'Father we are honoured to worship you' line really.
Great song would love to hear it with a full band!
cheers,
gav.
cool cheers gav, will have a look at the end of the chorus.
Josh,
I like your song. I, too, have looked around at God's magnificent creation and been reduced to provlaiming HIs glory and singing out his praises.
I am the one who wrote a song titled "All Creation Sings" based on Psalm 19 that is out here on the songwriting forum. (http://www.worshipcentral.org/forum/topic/all-creation-sings).
Your song has a nice feel to it and then has that nice little pre-chorus echoing the majestic theme. I can hear a bigger choir singing along behind you on the chorus. I agree with Gavin that the break before the last line of the chorus is a bit long. I also am intruiged by the "There are none like You" section as it adds a nice coda int eh song bringing it down and then slowly back up, but think it does not fit as well with the focus of the song. Perhaps that could be rewritten with thoughts about God's glory and majesty to echo that theme. I think Revelation 5:11-14 may help for getting an idea of majesty and glory. The only other bit of feedback is that it is a passive song. The only action is that we are "honoured to worship You." Perhaps rewording the line to be "Join all creation" - or provoking our worship - that is action. However, there is nothing wrong with having a song that just declares God's awesomeness. Thanks for sharing it.
Be encouraged,
Graham Page
WAVE Band
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