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5 January 2009 - 10:58pm
Hello everyone!
this is my first contribution to this forum so it's all pretty new to me.
I've been writing songs for quite a few years mainly in my mother language; English.
Living in Germany means that I don't have much opportunity to try out my English worship songs in the services or have constructive criticism on text and lyrics by people whose mother language is also English.
It would be great to get some feedback from you guys - so please listen and make your comments :-)
Cheers,
Martin
PS Here's the text:
God is in this place
Vs.1
Hearts now are changing, darkness is fading,
Truth is prevailing, God is in this place.
Tears of repentance, songs of deliverance,
Hands raised in reverence, God is in this place.
Pre-chorus:
And all across this land the church of Christ now stands,
United in the son, we’ll see his kingdom come.
Chorus
Come now in power, come now in glory,
Come now in splendor, we love and adore you,
Jesus the lamb, the glorious, the great I am.
Crowned with all power, crowned with all glory,
Crowned with our worship we love and adore you,
Jesus the lamb, the glorious, the great I am.
Vs.2
Deaf now are hearing, blind men are seeing.
Sickness is fleeing, God is in this place.
Chains now are broken, forgiveness is spoken,
Now in this moment God is in this place.
Pre-chorus (as above)
Chorus (as above)
Words and Music by Martin Bankart
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5 January 2009 - 11:45pm
Hey Martin,
Nice song, I like how positive and uplifting the theme is! My only thought was that the second part of the chorus is very similar to the first, perhaps if the lyrics in the second half were changed to something different it'd add a bit more variation? Perhaps something about God loving us to tie in with us loving God?
Just a thought - great song though, keep it up!
Michael
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Hi Michael,
Thanks for the quick reply and positive comments.
That's an interesting point! I'll brood over it and see what I come up with.
Thanks.
Hey Martin,
Just to add, maybe you could split the chorus down the middle? Do V1-B-C1-V2-B-C2…? From my own personal point of view the chorus feels a bit lengthy at the moment and that might help with Michaels comment too.
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