Josh Gauton
From St Thomas Crookes Sheffield
25 May 2009 - 7:43pm
Hi all,
I'm currently in South Africa with the Soul Action programme (which for those of you who havn't come across it, it's the joint charitable venture between Tearfund and Soul Survivor) which has been great so far, and this song was written after a word was brought in a small Soul Action meeting about God bringing a new start and possibly revival and renewal. Since then I have heard the word revival popping up a lot, and I'm unsure whether the word was for South Africa or back home in England, but anyway I wrote this song to kind of sum up what we were feeling God was saying, and also to convey the fact that any revival that may come would have to have its primary purpose as bringing glory to the name of God. So here is the song and the lyrics! I know its not finished so please send me some ideas and criticisms.
Verse 1:
Let a shout of praise arise out of this barren land,
We seek salvation for your people, lead them back to you
Verse 2:
Let thirsty hearts be filled with living water from above,
Pour out your spirit and renew us in your love
Pre-Chorus:
Bring glory to your name,
Bring glory to your name
Chorus:
Across this nation Lord,
Restore your throne
For only you are king above all kings
Your name exalted high,
Be glorified
As we declare that only you are God,
Only you are God
Verse 3:
We want to radiate your glory for all the world to see,
Conformed unto your likeness by your power O God
Verse 4:
We are willing, we are able so use us Lord we pray,
Let us take new ground in victory through Christ
PRE-CHORUS
CHORUS
There are a couple of lines i'm not so sure about, like the second line of the first verse, and the last line of the fourth verse as I was not sure whether to use 'in victory through Christ' or 'and stand in victory'. Also don't know if it needs a bridge?
Would love feedback guys, many thanks in advance
Josh
(ps I know various parts are not perfectly in sync but I only have a simple programme and a mic and not much time for editing everything manually!)
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Philip
From unknown
25 May 2009 - 7:53pm
Hey Josh
The melody sounds really awesome. "Victory in/through Christ" sounds better. When I listened to the pre-chorus on the way to the chorus I was kinda expecting the Chorus to be fast, if you know what I mean. I think it does need a bridge cause this is a good song with a really cool melody and I think a bridge will be awesome to keep the song going longer for a bit.
In Christ
Philip
Hey Philip, I thought I prefered 'in victory through Christ', glad you did too! Thanks for the advice, I'll start having a thing about a bridge.
Josh
Great song Gauton!
I love the melody! Can't find anything constructive to say yet so in the words of Dan Blythe - "Nice one"
Josh
Classic blythe. Thanks P man. Do you have any thoughts on possible bridges? Like a theme or something?
hey there,
great start on this, really good recording and superb voice (you sound just like sam parker from soul survivor).
i wonder why you bring the music down in the chorus? for me it would be better to belt it out louder, but maybe thats just me.
also im not sure the line 'restore your throne' makes sense?
what are you trying to say there? the Lords throne isnt affected by a nation not following him is it?
God bless,
gav.
Hey
I wonder if the chorus would work better as a tag and then write a new chorus. Im with Gav on the belt out chorus. I think this song is crying out for it/ But just in my opinion.
Pete
hey thanks guys, thats interesting you say about a faster chorus, the original chorus was actually faster but i didn't like it so i put in this new chorus. my idea with this current chorus is actually to have it played faster by the instruments than is being sung, like having an electric guitar play the chords high up and with a quick rhythm. Its really hard to explain and i dont think I have done a good job! but i am interested in putting that part as a tag, thus solving the bridge problem, and coming up with a new chorus.
and Gavin, the idea with the restore your throne line is to take 'across this nation, lord, restore your throne' as one line, with its meaning being for God to make his presence known to our/the and establish himself as the obvious ruler of the nation, recognised by those in it. I wasnt referring to God's eternal throne and rule over the earth, which i agree is not effected by whether nations follow him or not. It was more that people would recognise him as king, if you see what i mean? im not too good at explaining whats in my head! But you might be right, the line might not make sense theologically.
thanks,
josh
Hey,
Wow what a great song, good work. If you do end up belting out the chorus, you could think about writing a bridge which takes the pace down a notch, and then goes back into a belting chorus.
I really like those lyrics "Your name exalted high, be glorified" they could be a good staring point for a bridge?
Joe
www.worshipbox.org.uk
hi josh,
thanks for your thoughts, i know what youre trying to say i just think you can say it better.
i think another line like 'across this nation lord, pour our your spirit' would work better and be less confusing.
keep working on it, you have loads of gifts.
God bless,
gav.
do you guys reckon I should make a completely new chorus and use the present chorus as a bridge or do you think i should use parts from the current chorus and take it into a chorus?
also yeah Gav i might do something like that with the 'across this nation' line, better to avoid confusion!
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