bakeyman
From unknown
1 November 2009 - 5:38am
hey, here is my song "call on you"
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Luke Strickland
From James Street Church
2 November 2009 - 8:08am
Hi Bakeyman, liked the simplicity of your lyrics and also liked the upbeat nature of the song, which reflects our dependence on God. I did wonder if a bridge or a tag at the end might add an extra dimension, perhaps something about God answering when we call? Just my thoughts though, good work.
Luke
Please respond with your comments on my songs if you like them and think they should make it on the next worship central podcast
adam
LYRICS - "CALL ON YOU"
verse
In everything I want to do, I give all over to you
All my hopes dreams and plans, I place them into your hands
Chorus
I call on you almighty God
I call on you risen lord
I call on you Jesus Christ
I call on you I call on you
Verse 2
Although the storms around me rage and the wind it blows against my face
I will trust in your love from the mire you picked me up
Verse 3
I will wait in this place, humbly I will seek your face
I know you will hear my cry and answer my prayer tonight
anyone want to comment on this song...please?
Hi Adam,
I really like the simplicity of the chorus. The feel sort of reminds me of early an Delirious song. I also really like the 'from the mire' line also.
I just wonder whethere there needs to be some kind of bridge or pre-chorus because the same melody runs throughout the whole song.
The recording and arrangement is good as well.
Nick
Correct me if I am wrong but it seems like your melody in the verse is almost the same as your melody in the chorus. I'd like to see the melody rise a bit in chorus.
again i'm liking the simplicity! but yea really i feel its all on one level maybe a bit more dynamics thats all really, but simple, effective and catchy, really good!
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