TheRuthJones
From KingsGate Community Church
12 May 2009 - 5:17pm
Here's a song i've just written today!! I got the chorus in my head while i was on a bike ride...and when i got home i started writing!!!
It's called Always Lord:
Verse 1:
Jesus, I love you, I'll worship you in every season.
All the time, i want to bring glory to your name, i want to give you praise, nomatte where i am.
Chorus:
In my life you're always Lord.
In my life you're always Lord.
All the time, through thick and thin.
In my live you're always Lord.
Verse 2:
In the times, when i feel so dry, i still neew to remember, that you're here for me.
Because you are the one, who sent your son to die, for all that i've done, wrong.
Bridge:
And i love you, forever, and ever, and ever [x4]
That's it :D
I shall upload the MP3 and tell me your thoughts on it!!
God bless you!!
x
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Chris Sayburn
From Worship Central // Leeds Adviser
13 May 2009 - 3:10pm
Hey Ruth,
Thanks for posting this song, I love it when melodies just pop into your head at random times!
If you are wanting this song to be congregational I would consider making the verses a bit more consistent with syllables and lyrical rhythm as it changes a lot between lines and verses.
Also just a thought for the chorus lyrics, Is Jesus Lord of our lives all the time or do we put other things like 'idols' in His rightful place all the time? I know that is the case for me.
I would consider something like...
Jesus, be the Lord of me
Jesus, be my everything
All the time, through thick and thin
Jesus be the Lord of me.
That might just be me though so feel free to tell me to pipe down!! :)
Keep going with it, as you say it's still really new, try and be ruthless (no pun on your name intended) and try line by line to get it as strong as possible.
If it is just a song between you and God and not meant for a congregation then it's your offering and God loves it!
Heyy, thanks for your input :)
I was thinking about maybe changing it to: "In my life, you are my lord" or something like that...but atm i'm not using it in a group worship enviroment.
:) x
hi ruth,
sorry to disagree with my northern mate chris, but i think the chorus is fine as it is. a simple effective chorus almost always is the best type. i think Jesus is still Lord even tho we might not always focus on him in the way we should.
he makes a good point about the verse syllables tho.
the words are pretty good in fact considering you only wrote it very quickly.
the bridge is nice aswell. are there guys in your church who you can take it to and ask them to play it and see if it helps them to worship?
God bless,
gav.
Hey, thanks :)
I might go through the verse again and see what i can do with it to make it flow more :)
I'm part of my church's youth worship team, and we've been talking about writing our own worship songs and using them, so i'll probably play it for them sometime :)
x
Hi Ruth
Like it! As others have said, it could do with a bit of gentle smoothing around the edges if it is to be used for corporate worship, but at the mo, it's a good song from you to Jesus. Good to hear you're going to play it to some others, and work on it some more - both good disciplines with new songs.
As it is, I just LOVE the pause before "wrong" on the last line of verse 2! It is a possible candidate for the congregational smoothing operation, but it made me smile - in a good way!
Thanks for posting it, and keep riding your bike!
God bless
Rog
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