I like this John - it is very competently written with nice harmonies and easy to pick up. I'm a sucker from chromatically descending bass lines! I also like the second vocal harmony very much. I can see it being used liturgically. The style is quite old fashioned but I don't have a problem with that - my personal hobby horse is that much of professional worship music is so uniformly bland. I hope you have success with this. If you do a lot of this type of writing, try sending some stuff to publishers. The American ones give you the quickest response and are probably more in tune with your style. Have a look on http://www.cmpamusic.org/html/main.isx for some potential firms.